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ONLINE SHOPPING IS BECOMING MORE POPULAR. HOW COULD THIS TREND AFFECT OUR ENVIRONMENT AND THE KINDS OF WORK REQUIRED?

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It is true that people go shopping increasingly on the internet and make the environment worse. Several problems have resulted from
this
 tendency and they should be tackled by a number of effective solutions
from
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for
 people As air pollution, several related problems can be anticipated. The main issue is that there
are
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is
 a lot of shipper, they drive
motorbike
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the motorbike
motorbikes
 to send goods everyday. Smoke from
vehicle
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a vehicle
the vehicle
vehicles
 will release to the environment.
Therefore
, toxic gas will fly into the
air causing
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air, causing
 greenhouse effect and puncturing ozone layer. Another problem is that waste packaging from goods will be dropped to the road and
sea
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the sea
, more garbage will be burned. Since
such
 issues are serious, the government and individuals should take steps immediately to address these problems. The
first
 solution would be shopping offline, they should go to the supermarket to buy food and go to the shopping
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 to buy clothes. A
second
 measure would be choose the right and necessary items when buying online, avoid returning goods. If they return the product, the shipper will have to get another item back for them, causing increased emissions to the environment Inconclusion, there are various negative consequences of online shopping and appropriate steps need to be taken to tackle these problem
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