Some people say that fashion affects our lives in a negative way however others say that it has more positive effects on our life discuss and give your opinion??

people
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People
use
fashion
for looking
smart but
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smart, but
there are some people who
says
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say
that it affects badly to the environment while others argue that it has many positive effects in our lives. There are some reasons that why some people say that
fashion
affects our lives in a negative way. The
first
and foremost reason is that it makes youngsters materialistic because
fashion
shows trending things
everyday
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every day
which badly effects on the children and rather than focus on their
studies they
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studies, they
show their lot of interest to buy things for showing their status most of the youngsters trying to purchase new type of product which is available in the market and they start over spending on these products and things in order to stay updated in the
fashion
that puts financial burden on their parents respectively.
however
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However
fashion
has a positive
effects
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effect
in our life, there is a
biggest
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big
bigger
advantage of generating income with the help of
fashion
with the help of
fashion
person can earn money by selling
suchh
to so extreme a degree
such
items which
is associated
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are associated
with
fashion
such
is
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are
bags and shoes
,
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,
makeup and so on.
fashion
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Fashion
is
also
help
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helping
the people to make their personality that makes more confident and person can do their work
with full
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with, full
of energy and without any hesitation is in the front of any
stranger person
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stranger in person
. To conclude
,
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,
although
there are numerous positive effects of
fashion but
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fashion, but
indeed the negative effects are
to
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with
dad to ignore we need to regulate the effect of
fashion
in our life so that it does not affect us badly.

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