While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is a concern to many that global warming is becoming a most significant

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environment

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environmental

issue

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. Some believe that people should pay more attention on the

issue

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deforestation

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because it has a more serious influence on the world. In my opinion, the growing

population

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is the core problem which we should

firstly

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address. Global warming causes two serious

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environment

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environmental

problems.

Firstly

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, it is increasing the global average temperature linearly and

this

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is caused by the greenhouse gas which is highly unlikely to be reused.

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, when the temperature starts rising, there are no tools or technologies to decrease it or even stop it.

Secondly

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land mass

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the land mass

reducing

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reduced

because the sea level is increasing considerably.

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, according to research, several islands will be submerged by the rising ocean volume in the

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few

decades resulting

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decades, resulting

in global warming, leading to major

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environment

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environmental

issues. The

deforestation

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is becoming an irreversible

problem especially

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problem, especially

in the developing countries. These countries are biased towards

deforestation

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for development of various economic reasons,

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they overuse

deforestation

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for

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resources

such

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as wood. Once the trees and forests have

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been

cut down, these affected areas need decades to recover,

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, some areas may never be able to grow trees again.

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, parts of the rainforest in some developing countries have been destroyed completely.

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deforestation

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has much more negative influence than its economic profits. The growing

population

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is the main

issue

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, which can lead to the problems stated above. More people

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mean

more cars, buses and power stations,

such

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facilities

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facility's

discharge large amounts of greenhouse gas every day. Increased

population

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means a need for more space, as well as more food to live, resulting in increasing the size of cities and farmlands. In some countries,

deforestation

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becomes necessary because they need the land to feed the mass

population

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. So, we are facing the real

issue

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in the world is the growing

population

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. In conclusion, it is true that global warming can cause some serious

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environment

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environmental

problems and

deforestation

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can be an irreversible

issue

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in some developing countries.

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, the real global

issue

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which we are facing is the growing

population

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and if we solve it

first

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, we could address the global warming and

deforestation

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at the same time.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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376 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Greenhouse effect
Industrial emissions
Sea levels
Extreme weather events
Biodiversity
Carbon emissions
Renewable energy
Paris Climate Accord
Carbon cycle
Soil erosion
Water cycles
Carbon sequestration
Reforestation
Sustainable forest management
Indigenous communities
Localized impacts

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While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree ?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.