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some people think that children should not watch television as it has negative effects while some people believe that they should watch television as it helps them in their future. discuss both views and give your opinion.cc

#people #children #television #effects #future #cc
Learning is a continuous process from cradle to grave.
Series
Suggestion
A series
 of information is helpful to our children, youth as well as the aged.
Television
 which is one of the common and mostly familiar agent of information could go a long way to be helpful to the children. Lots of programmes which
enhances
Suggestion
enhance
 their cognitive domains could be trapped from the
television
. Another aspect of learning positively from
imitatation
the doctrine that representations of nature or human behavior should be accurate imitations
imitation
 can
also
 be viewed.
However
,
Accept space
,
television
 can
also
 be a very bad destructive agent. Many programmes and
informations
a message received and understood
information
 which are to be restricted according to some certain age groups can be easily accessed by children and
this
 might cause a bit of
negative impact
Suggestion
a negative impact
in
Suggestion
on
 their lives. Children might
also
 abuse watching
of
Suggestion
on
television
 for a very long hours of the
day
Accept comma addition
day, thus
thus
,
Accept space
,
making
alot
give out
allot
 an addict. Due to the series of the consequences of
television
 on children
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of
parent
Suggestion
parents
 banned their wards from view some programmes until they reach a certain age of maturity.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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