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The bar chart gives information about the number of social network users in the US from 2008 to 2014.

The bar chart gives information about the number of social network users in the US from 2008 to 2014.
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The bar chart gives information about the number of social
network
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users
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 in the US from 2008 to 2014.
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, it can be seen that
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 the amount of social
network
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users
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 increased over the whole period doubling from 84.5
million
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 in 2008 to 164.9
million
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 in 2014. Looking into the detail, there were 84.5
million
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of
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social
network
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users
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 in the US in 2008 (41.6% of people). The number of social
network
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users
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 increased dramatically over the
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 year reaching 109.2
million
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 in 2009 (51.6% of people in the US). Following that, the number of social
network
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users
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 rose
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 under 18
million
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 over the
next
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 year reaching 127
million
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 in 2010 (57.5% of people). After that, the amounts of social
network
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users
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 increased slightly over the
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 4 years reaching 140.2
million
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 in 2011 (61.2%), 150.4
million
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 in 2012 (63.5%), 157.9
million
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 in 2013 (64.7%) and 164.9
million
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 in 2014 (65.8%).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words network, users, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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