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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Now a
days
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day
 it is a hot topic amongst
number
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the number
a number
 of legal researchers and jurists that; how to minimize the
crime
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 rate in the society? Answer is comprised of various opinions,
some one
a human being
someone
 wishes to declare the criminals as
permanent menace
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a permanent menace
 for the society so let them behind the bars to rot,
however
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,
on the other
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hand section
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hand, section
 of people have
different view
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different views
a different view
, who put forth a lot of solutions for eradicating the crimes. Basically, to know about the
crime
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 and its reasons,
firstly
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, we have to look at the root cause which gives rise to offences. As a quote says; "Poverty is a
crime
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", is a basic cause for
emergence
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the emergence
 of mind set to commit the illegal acts. Crimes like; robbery, dacoity, extortion and corruption and others, are not an outcome of any other reason but the poverty.
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A section
 of people
want
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wants
 the government to enforce strict penalizing provisions for reducing of
such
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offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
offence
, by putting the offenders in jails for extended span. In a recent research carried out by the University of Peshawar's pupils, predict that many people are willing to send vagrants behind the bars for an indefinite time period, in
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 way the upcoming generation would be kept safe from exposure to
such
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 criminals. Whereby, there is another thought of
public
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the public
, according to them
crime
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 rate can be reduced by
adpoting
choose and follow; as of theories, ideas, policies, strategies or plans
adopting
adapting
 very facile ways. They
opinedd
express one's opinion openly and without fear or hesitation
opined
opened
 that if the government has sufficient means to provide opportunities for the young graduates, it would half the
crime
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 ratio, and which is a huge number, obviously.
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to go with the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
 opinion, due to the reasons provided therein.
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, offences
can not
can not
cannot
 be suppressed with the
power but
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power, but
 with opting progressive policies.

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