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Governments prohibiting the underage children for getting full-time jobs in certain countries. do you agree or disagree.

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In some countries, the government has laws which prohibit underage children to take full-time jobs. I support
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 step of the government.
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 laws are in place to prevent the exploitation of children. In many poor countries, children are forced to
work
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 by their families so that they could help to make both ends meet.
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, while doing so, their childhood is lost. They miss out on
education
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 and other things which children of their age must be
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. Government should not just prohibit the employment of children, but
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 make sure they get basic
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 free of cost. Mostly, poor families which cannot afford to send their kids to school, make them
work
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. In that way, they think, they will at least get some money flowing into their homes. These people, being themselves uneducated, do not understand the importance of schooling and
education
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. But if the government makes primary
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 mandatory and free, more children will be encouraged to join schools
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 of going to
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. Another aspect of child labour is regarding their safety and well-being. Underage children who
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 are mostly from underprivileged societies. Their employers may look down upon them. These children are unable to raise their voice if something unethical happens to them. They often find themselves helpless and try to blame
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 things on their destiny. All
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 experiences affect their self esteem and confidence. They grow up believing that they are good for nothing or they will always be
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 pathetic. Governments can play a major role in uplifting the status of children in their countries.
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 can be done by implementing stricter laws about employment of underage children and providing free basic
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 to them. After all, all children really deserve is love and happiness.

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