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The most important decision that young people have to follow is what career to choose. do you agree or disagree?

#decision #people #career
Now, The young generation has to decide the most crucial decision about their
life
 that what
career
 path to choose for their
future
. Because,
This
 is the time when you decide what will you do in your
future
 to earn money for you and support your family. I totally agree with it.
Firstly
, Suggestion from my side of young people that stay calm in
this
 process and
then
 decide in their mind what is my strength and my weakness? After work up on
this
, They have to think that which is proper field which one they love to select for the rest of their
life
 without feeling any depression and stress. Simply, Think twice and
then
 select a proper field which you can think of your own development and growth.
Secondly
, not run and think after what other people and my friend chose. It is your major decision for your whole
life
 so you did not waste your time to see what others do. Find your strong zone and work on them for you, better grow and
also
 better for
future
Suggestion
the future
.
On the other hand
, Do not get empathised yourself while set your
career
.
Furthermore
, Not listen what your parents and relative force to do something
instead
 of you do not like that thing for your
career
. Because,
This
 is your chance whether do it for your own and makes your
future
 bright or else screw it everything and
then
 apologies for yourself for the entire
life
. To conclude, The major decision for the young generation is definitely about their
career
 and
future
 scope. I recommend that all parents should support their children for whatever they do. I completely agree with
this
.

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