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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Do you agree with this statement?

#universities #numbers #students
In my opinion, men and women should have equal opportunities in the universities.
However
, I completely disagree with
idea
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the idea
 of accepting male and female students with the same proportions in every subject.
Firstly
, for me it seems just unrealistic idea that having the same number of men and women on all degree courses. Student numbers on any subject depend on applications, that the subject receives. In reality, many courses are more popular among one gender than the other and
this
 fat made the course full of that gender.
For example
, nursing, teaching courses
attract
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attracts
 female students, but law and economy faculties are vice versa.
Secondly
, there is no equality in numbers of males and females in life, and
also
difference
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the difference
 between
abilities
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the abilities
 of genders. Universities should accept the best candidates for each course.
For example
, if
university
Suggestion
a university
the university
 decided to fill courses with the same proportion, but males or female applicants applied more than expected, and
then
university
Suggestion
the university
universities
 should reject others, it is surely wrong to reject somebody in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of somebody.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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