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Some people think it is better for children to grow up in the city, while others think life in the countryside is more suitable. + and – sides of both places.

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A majority of people intend to stay in the
city
 in order to grow up their children,
however
 others prefer to live in the villages. There are advantages and disadvantages of both ideas, which will be discussed below. Living and growing in the
city
 could be a pleasure for a certain population due to existing a wide range of opportunities. Parents might give their children to any international schools for obtaining a better knowledge or sport clubs so as to become a good sportsman.
However
, there are some disadvantages of
this
,
such
 as children could be lost easily among crowded.
For instance
, police found 15 children in a day during the New Year Eve from the capital
city
.
Moreover
, the number of car accidents is becoming increasing, especially between 3-15 ages. Others prefer to stay and raise their children in the countryside than the
city
. Most of them should be healthier due to the climate and food. There are more trees and mountains with less vehicles not as like as the
city
. Every day children might drink fresh milk, recently come out of the cow or eat vegetables and fruits, which parents planted without any chemicals. After consuming these products, they should be stronger than
city
’s ones.
On the other hand
, in IT century parents could hardly give a good education in a lack of opportunities in villages, which is barely seen any modern schools or hi-tech sport clubs.
For example
, any world champions despite of being grown up in villages practice their exercises in
city
 facilities. To summarize, growing up in any places has its own plus and minus sides so as parents have to concentrate on more advantages for their children.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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