Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid

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It is argued by many people that being famous is problematic and yet has some merits too. I believe despite some concerns about their safety, celebrity status provides them with enormous wealth, unlike an average person. Famous people often attract unwanted attention and are followed by stalkers which can be a concern for their safety.
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targeted by people who post nasty comments on social media, it is common to hear threats on phones, or expecting absurd letters from obsessed fans. Perhaps the most common example would
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was mobbed by her fan during her company launch at Sephora outlet.
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she didn’t get any injury, she was unhappy as it required her to cancel the event.
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, these incidents can be restricted or can be minimized to zero by implementing a stringent security system. Fame and status of celebrity bring a huge fortune to them
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more or less impractical for most of us to even think about. Profit earned by celebrities
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often way too bigger than an average salary. With uncountable wealth, celebrities can buy luxurious cars, home and can turn a dream
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into a reality
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, Paris Hiltlon, Justin Beiber and other famous celebrities earn millions of dollars by performing in a single concert, whereas an ordinary person might not be able to earn
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, I believe being famous allows you to enjoy worldly materialistic things and makes one wealthy that one can only desire to become. In conclusion,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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