Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid

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It is argued by many people that being famous is problematic and yet has some merits too. I believe despite some concerns about their safety, celebrity status provides them with enormous wealth, unlike an average person. Famous people often attract unwanted attention and are followed by stalkers which can be a concern for their safety.

That is

to say, due to their profession they are always

been

the state or fact of existing

being

targeted by people who post nasty comments on social media, it is common to hear threats on phones, or expecting absurd letters from obsessed fans. Perhaps the most common example would

kylie

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Kylie

Jenner who

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Jenner, who

was mobbed by her fan during her company launch at Sephora outlet.

Although

she didn’t get any injury, she was unhappy as it required her to cancel the event.

However

, these incidents can be restricted or can be minimized to zero by implementing a stringent security system. Fame and status of celebrity bring a huge fortune to them

that is

more or less impractical for most of us to even think about. Profit earned by celebrities

Suggestion

has been

often way too bigger than an average salary. With uncountable wealth, celebrities can buy luxurious cars, home and can turn a dream

into a to reality

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into a reality

For example

, Paris Hiltlon, Justin Beiber and other famous celebrities earn millions of dollars by performing in a single concert, whereas an ordinary person might not be able to earn

this

amount in his entire lifetime.

Hence

, I believe being famous allows you to enjoy worldly materialistic things and makes one wealthy that one can only desire to become. In conclusion,

although

being a celebrity has some downfall like they are at high risk of being harassed all the times, the advantage of a famous personality allows one to enjoy a luxurious life which many crave for is more significant than

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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

other negative side.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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Some people think that to learn about other countries, they need to travel. Some say that it is not necessary to travel; we can have information through TV and Internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.