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Band 4

The use of personal cars has increased more than ever before but this use of cars cause many problems.what are those problems? In order to reduce problems,should we discourage people to use cars? Give reasons?

#cars #people
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There has been
significant
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 rise in
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usage
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the usage
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 of personal
cars
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 by
the
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apply
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society. More utilization of four
whellers
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wheelers
 can increase the pollution level and
also
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 impacts the health of the individuals.There are various measures which
needs
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 to be taken to encourage
people
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 to curb the
usage
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 of
cars
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. Apparently,more
usage
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 of automobiles can adulterate the environment with pollutants. To elaborate,
daily
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the daily
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 running of
cars
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 on the roads emit harmful carbon emissions into the atmosphere which impacts the quality of air and
thus
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 leads to higher AQI level .
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,as per
the
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a
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 recent survey,Delhi is considered as
most
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the most
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 polluted city in the world
due to
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higher
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 percentage of
cars
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 on the road.
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 to it,more utilization of
cars
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have
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bad
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a bad
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 impact on the health of
people
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. To describe,
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majority of
people
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 travel by
their
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car
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 for daily commuting to
office
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the office
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,nearby market areas and other nearby locations.
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,there is no physical activity in humans which would make them prone to diseases like obesity, heart issues and various other ailments. To save cities from
severage
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severe
 damage from
cars
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,
Government
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the Government
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 should upgrade vehicles to encourage
people
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 to travel by public transport system. To describe,
introduction
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the introduction
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 of metros, e-Rickshaws, good quality ac buses and shuttle facilities to
near by
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nearby
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 locations would help
people
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 in easy commuting.
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,it might motivate
people
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 to stop driving their own
vehicle
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vehicles
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.
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,
increase
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an increase
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 in fuel
cost
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costs
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 might stop
middle
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the middle
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 class
to run
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from running
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car
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cars
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 on
daily
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a daily
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 basis. To elaborate, with the rise in
economy
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the economy
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,
now
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middle class
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middle-class
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people
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 can afford to travel by
car
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.
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,
with
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apply
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 the subsequent rise in oil
cost
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costs
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 would prohibit the
usage
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 of
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the car
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car
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cars
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 by
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the middle
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middle income
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middle-income
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 group.
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,excessive running of
cars
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 impacts the
overall
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 environment of cities and would introduce various ailments.
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,
Government
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the Government
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 should introduce better transport
facilties
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facilities
 and should increase the petrol or
diseal
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diesel
 cost.

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Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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