Young people are leaving their homes frome rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantage?

In recent years, young people tend to continue their education and improve their occupation by moving to cities
due t
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the cities
o lack of facilities and having different opportunities on their place.
Although
there are number
s of dr
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a number
number
awbacks occurring to immigrate youngsters, I believe that the benefits outweigh notable. There are various reasons that immigration dramatically increase from rural areas. The most significant reason is the availability of colleges , uni
ve
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,
rsities and other educational places.
Also
young people have a chance to choose many different fields of study without any restriction in equipped and modern university in order to reach high l
evel of ed
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a high level
ucation.
For instan
ce they could
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instance, they
be a doctor or engine
er.
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an engineer
Moreov
er they able
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Moreover, they
to access high standard of living by employing in many companies and organization that exist in big cities. On the other hand t
here are n
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hand, there
umber
of jo
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a number
b opportunities in the megaci
ties. In t
he other words the chance of finding good career with high income and good benefits in cities attrac
t them
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attracts
to replace as making life much easier an comfortable for themselves and their families.
Although
, moving to the city have many drawbacks like overpopulation, air pollution, traffic jam, and many other problems, I believe that the advantages of
this
replacement outweigh due to the fact that increasing graduated people increase the level of society’s education so
this
society able to develop faster and compet
ently.
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competencies
competence
competency
On the other hand
more people can live in appropriate circumstance in city i
n or
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the city
a city
cities
der to find better
job in mo
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a better job
better jobs
dern cities. To conclude, in recent decades, young generation keen on immigrate to the urbane
area
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urban
urbanized
from rural area because of many facilities and attraction. Regardless of disadv
antage, I th
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a disadvantage
ink the benefits are more remarkable to develop a society.
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