The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetatian diet.

The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetatian diet.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetatian diet.
This
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line graph illustrates
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the figure of teenagers in the UK who be
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vegetarian. The vertical axis shows a percentage and
horizontal
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the horizontal
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axis shows the
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from 1960 to 2020. At first glance, the trend of who eat only vegetable have fluctuated over the past 6
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. The population of teenage
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has begun since 1960,
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rose dramatically for 20
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until peaks at
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approximately
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15% in 1980.
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, the percentage reduced to around 6% in 1990. Between 1990 to 2000, it was the fluctuated ages of
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the proportion
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of younger vegetarian, the highest
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in the vicinity of 7.5% and the lowest of
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less than 5%. After rising
modest
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a
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decade, it
leveled
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off at 11 or 12%. The rest of the
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only a
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dip
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. In summary,
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diet is just a fashion in the past 60
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and not a mainstream diet for
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adolescents
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. It seems
hardly
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for the proportion of
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vegetarians
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will
more
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be more
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than 15% in the future.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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