Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To What extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#people #choices

It is said that our daily lives are teeming with choices because of the significant industrial and technological development which occurred the

last

several decades.

Although

I agree with

this

idea to some extent if you live in an urban

are

a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)

area

, it’s not always the case for those in

countryside

Suggestion

the countryside

. On the one hand, people living in a big city are now tired of the situation

that is

snowed under with too many choices you have to make. Take online

shopping

Accept comma addition

shopping, for

for example

, there are not only many websites where you buy things, but

also

each

websites

Suggestion

website

has

enormous variety

Suggestion

an enormous variety

of products for one type of thing you are planning to buy.

As a result

, people are struggling to choose a specific thing and they end up wasting large amount of time. Another example is that it’s getting more challenging to reach

trust-worthy

worthy of trust or belief

trustworthy

information.

This

is because there are so many mass media that some of them broadcast fake

news which

Accept comma addition

news, which

confuse people who are well educated enough to judge what is true and what is not.

On the other hand

, people living in a rural area

don’t

always appreciate the development. There was an article saying that recently the number of people who move out of

city

Suggestion

the city

to seek for

laid-back life style

Suggestion

the laid-back lifestyle

laid-back lifestyle

a laid-back lifestyle

in a small town had been increasing. According to the paper, it is because people feel more comfortable in the environment with less options and decisions to make. Actually, there are even places in my country where no Internet is available.

Surely

Suggestion

Sure

, compared to urban people, those who live in

countryside

Suggestion

the countryside

don’t

have many choices in their life. In conclusion, I

don’t

think the situation that you have too many choices

don’t

always apply to everyone.

However it

Accept comma addition

However, it

depends on where you live.

Submitted by deiki.debun on Fri Feb 28 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

297 words

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

Topic Vocabulary:

overwhelmed
decision fatigue
paralysis by analysis
consumerism
globalization
personal autonomy
market saturation
option overload
decision-making process
psychological well-being
buyer's remorse
customization
trade-offs
minimalism
information superhighway

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

5
band
In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.
It is prevalent in some countries that most students prefer to stop their universities for a short term in order to work or travel el abroad. There are many advantages s of this tendency, such as gaining experience and reducing stress. Meanwhile, it may have downsides like adaptation problems and feeling disorientation.
7.5
band
You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter •describe the problem with the equipment •explain how this problem is affecting your work •say what you want the shop or company to do
As a long-time customer of your company, I am writing to you to express my complaint about a device which I bought last month. The device is an internet modem and the serial number is 211536431.
5
band
Some people think computers and the Internet are more important in child’s education. Others believe that schools and teachers are essential for children to learn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In developing epochs, modern technologies are becoming popular. Some humans believe that social media and computers are crucial in children's studies. However, others view pupils are able to study positive impact in schools and with teachers. This essay discusses how both are essential for effective learning.
4
band
In some countries, the numbers of children aged 15 and younger are increasing constantly. What are the current and future effects of an ever-increasing population?
In some nations, especially in developing countries, the number of mortality have been increased since a decade ago. Because of that, the number of their population mosty consists of teens and children. This phenomenon could make any impacts to various sectors, such as human resource, economy, education, also other sectors. If current situation is not taken care by goverment or someone expert, some bad effects could be happen in the future.
6
band
Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is true that medicines and other products are routinely tested on animals before they are cleared for human use. While I tend towards the viewpoint that animal testing is morally wrong, I would have to support a limited amount of animal experimentation for the development of medicines.

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To What extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.

Some people think computers and the Internet are more important in child’s education. Others believe that schools and teachers are essential for children to learn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some countries, the numbers of children aged 15 and younger are increasing constantly. What are the current and future effects of an ever-increasing population?