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Describe the information in the table and make comparisons where appropriate. » Average distance in miles travelled per person per year Changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000 20012006 Walking255237 Bicycle5141 Car31994806 Local bus429274 Local distance bus54124 Train289366 Taxi1342 Other450585 All modes47406475

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The table illustrates the average distances a British travelled by different means of transport in the years 1985 and 2000. It is clear that using cars
was
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were
 by far the most common way of travelling in both years.
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, compared to 1985, the total
distance
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 travelled by people in England was considerably more than in 2000,
wih
expresses the means used
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 the figure of 6475 miles per person. As can be seen from the table, the use of car, long
distance
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 bus, train and taxi was more popular in 2000 than 1985. To go into detail, a person travelled 54 and 289 miles by long
distance
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 bus and train in 1985 respectively, while via the same forms of transport, they travelled about 124 and 366 miles in 2000. Over the same period of time, the average
distance
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 travelled by
English
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the English
 in a car rose from 3199 to 4806 miles per person. In the case of
taxi
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the taxi
, there was a three-time increase over 15 years, from mere 13 miles in 1985 to 42 miles in the year 2000. Other modes showed no difference, they were used to travel 450 miles in 1985 and 585 miles in 2000. The data on the average
distance
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 travelled by local bus, bicycle and on foot saw an opposite trend. According to the table, 274 miles was travelled by local bus in 2000, which was 55 miles
fewer
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less
 than that of 1985. Walking and bicycle witnessed no significant decline.
Thay
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They
 decreased only 18 and 10 miles respectively between 15 years.

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