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These days, people tend to change many jobs during their lifetime. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

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The trend of switching
jobs
 is becoming more popular among
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youngsters because of several factors which have more merits over the demerits.
This
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To begin
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 the significant advantage is that people
are getting
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 a wide range of experience when they
switched
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their
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jobs
. Because they get to work with the latest technology
as well as
 different working
culture
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.
For instance
, one employee is currently working with web
based
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web-based
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 company which only
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 the HTML language.
However
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 after changing to a new company which
use
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 more advanced language,
such
 as JAVA,
BOOTSTRAP
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, employees will get experience
to learn
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Moreover
, switching
jobs
 can be beneficial in terms of
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 in the pay scale. Generally, being in the same organization, employees will get only
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-5% increment.
While
,
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 in the new firm employees have more chance to get a higher package
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 to current one.
In addition
,
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 are more likely to get
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 in their position because it takes more years to get promoted in the same organization.
For example
, if you are working as an executive, there might be a chance to get an offer at a
senior level
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 position in
different
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 corporate.
Nevertheless
, there is
a
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one drawback of switching
jobs
 in different
firm
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firms
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that
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 is to build
a
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trust among the employers and other higher
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. It will become challenging to start with the new responsibilities
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 the new environment.
However
, that depends upon the individual's skills. Some people who are highly skilled can
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this
 in a few months. All in
all
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 there are more benefits in terms of money
as well as
 status in the organisation
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too
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few
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 challenges which
usually
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 faced in every company.
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Grammar
Try improving your grammar for a higher score. For instance, 'compare too few challenges' should be 'compared to a few challenges'
Conclusion
Your essay lacks a robust conclusion. Try summarising your primary points in a strong concluding paragraph.
Content
Try to maintain a balanced view while explaining the pros and cons. The cons are less elaborative than the pros in your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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