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Online shopping is replacing the shopping in stores. Do you think it is positive or negative?

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It is true that e-shopping is gaining popularity and individuals prefer it over the offline shopping. In my opinion, it is a positive development.
Firstly
, Shopping from online websites is undoubtedly beneficial for people as they can have a wide range of products from different companies to choose from. Take Flipkart, an e-commerce website, for an example. On the website, sellers from all over the world register their product at a competitive price.
Consequently
, consumers can see and compare the prices and features of a product they want to buy, which is offered by various registered sellers. Not only does
this
 offer range of products, but
also
 customers can buy at a reasonable price.
Secondly
, shopping over the internet saves a lot of time. One does not have to go to supermarkets or a mall which is often situated in an outskirt of the city.
This
 saves a lot of time as they do not have to travel all the way to a different corner of a city because they can order anything from a mobile or a laptop.
However
, some argue that the negative aspect of
such
 type shopping can be that individuals cannot see
items
Suggestion
the items
 in person. They have to rely on the images and videos or sometimes they are
also
 not available.
Nonetheless
, I believe
such
 type of argument I consider as vague because if they are not satisfied with the product
then
 return policy is available on almost all websites. In conclusion,
although
 some think that shopping from online websites is a negative development as it does not offer people to see things physically, it firmly believes that e-shopping is
boon
Suggestion
a boon
 for all walks of life and there is no harm if it is replacing offline shopping because of
aforementioned reasons
Suggestion
the aforementioned reasons
.

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