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Write about the following topic: In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The bar chart illustrates the total number of people visiting three London Museums annually from 2007 to 2012. Overall, there was a peak in the total number of visitors in 2012 while a
slow down
the act of slowing down or falling behind
slowdown
 was seen in 2009 and 2010. Victoria and Albert Museum had the highest of visitors in the
year
 2007 and 2008 which was close to 13
million
 each
year while
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year, while
on the other hand
 British Museum had approximately 12
million
 people visiting in the
year
 2007 and declined to about 6
million
 in the following years of 2008 and 2009. Over the
next
 three years, British Museum saw a steady and gradual increase of visitors and had its highest in the
year
 of 2012 (close to 14
million
). Whereas, Victoria and Albert Museum lost its popularity in the 2009 and was least popular till 2012 having 10
million
 people visiting in that
year
.
However
, National Gallery witnessed an incremental growth over all these years. Starting with the least popular choice among all the three museums with close to 6
million
 guests visiting annually in 2007 and surprising finishing with the maximum number of visitors in 2012 overall exceeding the 15
million
 mark, and became the most visited
museum
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museums
 in 2012.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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