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Some people think that children should start primary school later in life, other that they should start it before 7. Discuss both views and give me your opinion?

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Education plays a significant role in human life.
Although
 certain individual think that teenagers must start kindergarten later in life, Other think that it ought to be commenced earlier in 7. I completely agree with the later notion of starting earlier as they cross the
toodler
a young child
toddler
age
. On the one hand, People are thinking of starting kindergarten earliest at
age
 7 and I agree with it. Infant usually start recognising their parents at the
age
 of 2 when they are called infant. Slowly they start identifying the people in their
third
 year and at
this
age
 their mental ability start to function properly. The brain and other parts of the body start to grow and
this
 stage they are ready to commence their education.
For instance
, As per the Doctor’s association
toodler
a young child
toddler
 at the
age
 of 4 are perfect to start their learning as they overall function are ready to take on the challenges.
On the other hand
, People believing of sending their children later when they are completely grown. Parent are in the opinion that children are too young to start their schooling and they think that their kids are not completely grown physically and mentally. They say that
toodler
a young child
toddlers
toddler
 are not in a position to take basic care of going to washroom or where their own clothes.
Although
 certain
Toodler
a young child
toddler
toddlers
 is quick to take on a difficult learning task in school. Others are too weak to accept challenges offered to them.
For instance
, In India, Children are when they understand and recognise their parent properly until
then
toodler
a young child
toddler
toddlers
 are not admitted into the school for learning.
Hence
this
 is the reason why the parent denies in enrolling. In conclusion, while parents vary in their opinions, I strongly support in admitting pre-infant into school as it is the perfect
age
 for learning.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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