The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think the best way to deal with the problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A large number of people
has been living
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have been living
have lived
an unhealthy
life
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that could result in
oveweight
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
issues, and the government has been spending a huge amount of money and a great deal of efforts to cope with these problems. I strongly agree that the school should increase in providing more knowledge about the physical activities to its students. One of the most important reasons of educating children about
a
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an
active
lifestyle
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is that they could develop a habit to follow
this
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lifestyle
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for the rest of their
life
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. A broader understanding and effects of routine
excercises
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
exercise
can be emerged.
For example
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, any
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
such
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as running could generate
harmones which
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hormones, which
hormones which
harmonies which
can result in reducing stress in
life
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, and it could
also
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keep mind active.
Consequently
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, productiveness of
poeple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
will increase in the study and jobs.
Furthermore
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, gained knowledge can be transferred to other family members
such
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as parents, and grandparents.
This
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information transfer will bring enormous benefits to the society and reduce medical expenses of the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
. Another crucial aspect is that educating early about physical
activites
any specific behavior
activities
will not only help children to fight
againts
in contact with
against
many diseases, but
also
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it will help them later in
life
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. Normally those who do not
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
and
old
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older
people could more vulnerable to viruses because of their bodies could be
weaken
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weakened
to cope with random
viruse
(virology) ultramicroscopic infectious agent that replicates itself only within cells of living hosts; many are pathogenic; a piece of nucleic acid (DNA or RNA) wrapped in a thin coat of protein
virus
viruses
attacks. If they involve in any physical pastime games, they will easily have victory on the viruses.
For instance
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, the Corona virus, the epidemic which has been taking lots of
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
lies
life
, has taken
lifes
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the lives
lives
of a large number of old people. If these old people have a highly active
lifestyle
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, the situation would have been quite different. To sum up, an enormous
amout
a quantity of money
amount
of medical expenses could be saved if we could encourage
prople
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
to adopt
healhty
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a healthy lifestyle
healthy lifestyle
lifestyle
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by providing education and means of to keep them involved in these
activites
any specific behavior
activities
. I again firmly agree that we could deal with diseases
such
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as obesity by increasing children’s knowledge and understanding of physical
excercies
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
exercises
in the school.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity rates
  • health care system
  • physical education
  • instill
  • long term
  • raise awareness
  • healthier lifestyle choices
  • nutritional education
  • active transport
  • quality of instruction
  • facilities and equipment
  • diet control initiatives
  • community sports programs
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