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Many people are involved in sports when they are young but stop once they are adults. Why do many adults stop doing physical exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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It is an irrefutable fact that plenty of people in their early age do lots of exercise as compared to their adult age. There are several reasons for
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 a few visible influences too. Both the aspects are explained in the ensuing paragraphs. Discussing the reasons, the most common one is tension due to workload. As it is seen that people get depressed due to their thought regarding their work compare to the old days when they do not have any worry about it.
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, they get isolated from physical activities. The other cause is that they do not have enough time for it. Nowadays, because there is a plethora of their own works that act as a barrier like household works, child caring, office work and much more. By which they can not remain active for exercise. The mention reasons have some solutions too. The foremost solution is that they can do time management. By which they can take some of the time for themselves in order to do some aerobics or gym. As an outcome of
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, they can handle the problem of obesity in their life and may look younger than their age.
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, in their tight schedule, they may go by walk to their office. A good example of
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, for a person who does daily commutation, can leave the bus or car, a one-stop early in order to maintain fitness.
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 to conclude the topic it can
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 said that it is our life, no one other would do those things which are crucial, same as staying active is
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 a duty of our life.

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