It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. Do you agree that this is the main cause of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation?

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One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is the colossal

upsuge

a sudden forceful flow

upsurge

in the debate of whether media

plays

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play

a key

role

to increase a

juvinile

of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people

juvenile

crimes

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crime

or not.

However

refers to the speaker or writer

personally belive

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personally, believe

personally believe

personally believes

that the mass media

plays

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play

crusial

of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis

crucial

causal

role

in the mental growth of any person. In

this

eesay

an analytic or interpretive literary composition

essay

assay

easy

refers to the speaker or writer

am going to discuss some reasons and solutions to

resove

bring to an end; settle conclusively

resolve

resolved

this

problem. Let's begin with the

role

of media in a person's life. Social media has a huge impact on a person. What

refers to the speaker or writer

mean is that, if a child is following to his/ her

role

model

, so he/she

would would

past tense of "will"

would

like to be same as his

role

model

, whether the

role

model

is in a negative or positive side in the movie.

Furthermore

video

games

are

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are also played

are also playing

also play

have also played

also

play as important

role

as a movie star. There are lots of

videos

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video

game in the market, which are full of violence. Recent studies showed that 30 percent of

juvinile

of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people

juvenile

juveniles

crime increases because of violent

video

games. People prefer to buy same weapons in their real life as they see in the

video

games. There are some possible

solutions to stop in

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solutions to stop

the rising number of crimes committed by

juviniles

of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people

juveniles

First

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The first

and the most important, parents should keep an eye on their kids about the selection of their

video

games and the

role

model

whom they are

followong

about to be mentioned or specified

following

flown

flowing

to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits

too

. Giving a good education about the consequences of their actions is

also

important. Apart from

this

, there should be an age restriction when purchasing a

video

game on online or at physical stores. Take American people as an example, the ratio of crimes committed by

juviniles

of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people

juveniles

juvenile

has been decreased to 10 percent from 30 percent today and made feasible with

help

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the help

of parents. In conclusions,

media

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the media

is one of the most contributing

factor

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factors

juvinile

of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people

juvenile

crime, but it can be overcome by identifying the reasons behind

this

issues

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issue

with the

assisstance

the activity of contributing to the fulfillment of a need or furtherance of an effort or purpose

assistance

existence

of parents and law enforcements.

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