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Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

#people #government #money #arts
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Many people think that
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 spends behind
art
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 and other
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 things is a total waste, others think government should spend more on other things. I don't agree much with
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 statement, because the
art
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 reflects our history and history plays an important role in our life. In
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 paragraph, I intend to discuss my view points. On the one side, now a days people are learning about the craft, the ancient culture, the architecture and are keen in knowing more about old times. To appreciate
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 work, the authority is spending
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 in preserving old monuments, building
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 galleries, organizing exhibitions and many more.
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, a large
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 of
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 is building the world highest Sardar Vallabhbhai Patel's monument. In
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 project the government had spent a lump
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 of
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. As a consequence, tax
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 got increased with created a burden on middle class families. To resolve
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 issues union should balance the funding between preserving old cultures and developing necessary things for todays people. On the other side, many things that the state should spend more
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 in current major issues like building health cares, proper transportations services in rural areas, education centres, building for accommodating people because due to
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 inefficiency of
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 amenities people are facing many difficulties in day to day of life. Every year budget is presented which decide how much
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 should be spent on individual things. As an output of
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 budget the ministry is balancing between public needs and history. To put down in a nutshell, I would pen down, saying that, the union should prioritize the allotted funding
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, between present requirements or the
art
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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