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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
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The line graph compares the
waste
 output produced by three companies from 2000 to 2015.
Overall
,
while
 the amount of
waste
 produced by
company
 A and
company
B
 saw downward trends, the figure for
company
C
 increased rapidly over the
period
 shown. Another striking feature is that
company
 A was the biggest
waste
 producer among
three
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the three
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 companies during the majority of the
period
. In 2000, 12
tones
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tonnes
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 of
waste
 were produced by
company
 A, which was equal
the
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 figures for
company
B
 and
company
C
 combined. From 2000 to 2005, the
production
 of
waste
 in
company
B
, and
company
C
 increased significantly to 10 and 6
tones
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tonnes
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 respectively.
By contrast
,
waste
production
 by
company
 A experienced a slight decline of 1
tone
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ton
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. During the remaining
period
 from 2005 to 2015, after reaching a peak of 10
tones
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tonnes
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 of
waste
, the
production
 of
waste
 in
company
B
 plunged to approximately 3
tones
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tonnes
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.
Likewise
,
waste
production
 in
company
 A witnessed the same pattern but at a lower rate.
By contrast
, there was substantial growth in the figure for
company
C
, which stood at around 10
tones
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tonnes
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 and had surpassed
company
 A to become the largest
waste
 producer
at the end
 of the
period
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, company, b, c, period, tones, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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