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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
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The line graph compares the
waste
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 output produced by three companies from 2000 to 2015.
Overall
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,
while
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 the amount of
waste
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 produced by
company
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 A and
company
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B
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 saw downward trends, the figure for
company
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C
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 increased rapidly over the
period
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 shown. Another striking feature is that
company
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 A was the biggest
waste
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 producer among
three
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the three
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 companies during the majority of the
period
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. In 2000, 12
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tones
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tonnes
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 of
waste
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 were produced by
company
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 A, which was equal
the
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to the
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 figures for
company
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B
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 and
company
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C
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 combined. From 2000 to 2005, the
production
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 of
waste
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 in
company
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B
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, and
company
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C
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 increased significantly to 10 and 6
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tones
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tonnes
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 respectively.
By contrast
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,
waste
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production
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 by
company
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 A experienced a slight decline of 1
tone
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ton
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. During the remaining
period
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 from 2005 to 2015, after reaching a peak of 10
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tones
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tonnes
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 of
waste
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, the
production
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 of
waste
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 in
company
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B
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 plunged to approximately 3
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tones
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tonnes
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.
Likewise
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,
waste
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production
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 in
company
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 A witnessed the same pattern but at a lower rate.
By contrast
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, there was substantial growth in the figure for
company
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C
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, which stood at around 10
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tones
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tonnes
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 and had surpassed
company
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 A to become the largest
waste
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 producer
at the end
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 of the
period
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, company, b, c, period, tones, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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