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Smart phones are being used in classrooms more than ever before. Some people think that this aids the learning process, while other think it hinders it. Discuss both these views and give your Own Opinion.

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In the modern world, smart phones become one of the essential devices for everyone. Ten years ago, Smartphone and smart devices were not popular in any the average community. At the beginning of the 2007
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 smartphone starts to be a very familiar device
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 Not only because of they made the communication between people much easier, buy
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, how they offer a large range of services include; educational services
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 communication services
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 shopping
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save from ruin, destruction, or harm
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 Etc. Eventually, using
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 Students, usually, using g
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 to; search for information, understand a theory, or recognize a new technique. On one side
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 there is a group of people who clarify that using
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 in the classrooms has a serious effect on the students' mental ability. They claim that using
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 prevent the students from developing their imagination
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 By the rapidly desire for finding the answer without the chance of thinking about the questions for a proper
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 the students don't use their own brain to think
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 imagine and explore. On the other side, there
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 a very pessimistic point of view.
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 in the classrooms has a great effect on the students' attitude. In replace of wasting a lot of
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 for finding a certain theory or information, now
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 thanks to
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 and learn more information and theories at a short
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, in my opinion, I think that
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 are similar to any other devices
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they have advantages and disadvantages. But the key is how
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when and with whom? It should be used. Making equilibrium between using smart phones as a modern way of education
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and using the traditional ways of education, is the only way to reach the right way of education.
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