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Schools should do more to teach students about their health and wellbeing. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that children should be given more knowledge about
health
 and wellness in schools.
This
 essay completely agrees with that statement because children follow all the rules and regulations of the
school
 and schools can provide all the necessary
information
 to students of the same age group at the same time.
Firstly
, students abide by the rules of the
school
.
This
 is because they are afraid to face the punishment they may get if they do not follow the rules. Because of
this
, most of the students remain sincere and do what they are told to do. If children are provided with the
information
 and are given certain tasks to perform at
school
 to enhance their
health
 and wellness than they would do them as they would be afraid to be disciplined.
For example
, according to a survey conducted by The Hindustan Times on
school
-going children, it was found that 90 % students do their homework as they are scared of being punished.
Additionally
, children of the same age group can be provided with
information
 related to
health
 and wellness together as they will be in the same class. Owing to the increase in depression and less knowledge about menstruation in teenage girls, it is necessary to educate them about
this
.
For example
, as a part of government initiative in India, only girls studying in 8th standard of a government
school
 were given education about menstruation. In conclusion, schools should provide students with
information
 related to their
health
 and happiness as they are fearful to be punished and education which can be provided to specific age groups can be delivered easily.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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