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The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.
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The provided chart illustrates the survey result of 100,000
UK
 residents to find the countries they visit overseas from 1994 to 1998.
Besides
, different purposes of travel
at
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 the same period are clearly shown in the table above.
Overall
, as is observed from the given graphs, most of
people
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the people
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 who took the survey went aboard for holiday and Western Europe was their
most
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favourite destination.
Initially
, in 1994, more than 22,000
UK
 citizens visited foreign countries and among them, there were around 15,000
people
went
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 on their holidays. Fewer number of
people
 travelled to other countries for
business
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a business
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trip
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trips
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 or for
friend
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a friend
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 and relative
meeting
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meetings
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, about 3,000 and 2,600 respectively. A year later, in 1995, there was a slight drop in international travel
of
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the
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UK
 residents. In the following years,
total
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 number of oversea goers
steadly
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steadily
 increased and reached
the
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 peak of approximately 29,000 in 1998. They still remained a tendency to travel for holidays rather than other purposes, which accounted for around 21,000
people
 in the same year.
Whereas
people
 gradually became more interested in going overseas, Western Europe was the best option over the period. It welcomed about 18,000 out of 22,000 and 24,000 out of 29,000
UK
visitor
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visitors
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 in 1995 and
in
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1998, respectively. Despite
of
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a
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stable growth in
thenumber
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the number
 of travellers number, North America and other areas are unconsiderable destinations compared to that
of
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their
counterpart
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counterparts
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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