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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six area of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six area of the world.
#show #percentage #water #purpose #six #area #world
The charts indicate 25
place
Change to a plural noun
places
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 on the earth
taking
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talking
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 about
water
 and the way of using it. Sin
obvious
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obviously
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 all of
pie
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the pie
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chart
Fix the agreement mistake
charts
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 have the got the lowest
percentage
in
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for
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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domestic uses like at home.
however
 the largest
percentage
 went with
the
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apply
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agriculture
 and farms.the centre of
Asia
 has the greatest
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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percentage
 of
agriculture
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agricultural
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use
.
on the other hand
 in
Europe
 they did not
use
water
 so much as
Central
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in Central
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Asia
 or Africa. They just
use
 34.4
percentage
 what in the
industrial
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industry
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 they
use
eat
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to eat
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 a lot and the largest
percentage
 with them.if you check on Africa it's
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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almost II after
Asia
use
Correct subject-verb agreement
uses
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water
 in industrial and opposite of
Europe
. In North America and
Europe
Add a comma
,Europe
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 slightly
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 in industrial
use
 and just list for
percentage
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a percentage
the percentage
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 to
Europe
 South
Asia
 and South America
are uses
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are using
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 the
water
 in
agriculture
 rather than industrial.
overall
 they all
use
water
 much in the farmer and
agriculture
Europe
 and North America
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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use
water
 more than
other
Correct pronoun usage
others
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 in the industrial areas. Africa got the lowest
percentage
 in domestic and industrial uses.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, percentage, agriculture, asia, use, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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