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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#government #money #railways #roads
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It is true that government should spend money on railways rather than roads. There aren't many railways in our
country
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. In another
country
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 the people uses
train
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 to travel from
one
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 place to another place because it is cheaper and time can be consumed. If the
railway
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 is constructed in the major City
then
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 there will be less number of traffic congested and people don't have to worry about reaching their destination.
However
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, Large number of people can travel in same means from
one
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 destination to another
one
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. It can even help in transporting a large amount of goods from
one
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country
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 to another
country
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. We can even save petrol from the
railway
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 because
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train
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the train
 runs with the help of electricity and coal. I agree with the statement that government should spend money on the railways, but there are some drawbacks of the railways, they are
train
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 can only be driven to the place where the
railway
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 track is being constructed.
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 it is faster than other road transportation,
for example
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 car, bus and motorbike we have to wait for the
train
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 arrival and going time. It can create sound and air pollution, which can harm people and even animal health. To construct the
railway
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 a large amount of metal will be needed, which is not available in our
country
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 and we have to buy the product from another
country
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.
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  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
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  • last-mile connectivity
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