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Some people think that detailed criminal description on newspaper and TV has bad influences, so this kind of information should be restricted on media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many countries in the middle east are considering that the media should keep records of criminals hidden due to its malign influences. The topic has raised myriad arguments and controversies.
On
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In
 my personal experiences, I strongly against the idea, because keeping the
information
 closed will cause more catastrophes since it fails to warn the citizens about criminals and causes drawbacks on the freedom of
media
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the media
.
First
, showing
information
of
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about
on
 criminals improves people’s awareness. They can understand more about the
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
 of murderers, drug dealers, et cetera.
For example
, it was reported in California that a man denounced his
neighbor
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbour
 for being a drug dealer thanked to his strange manners, sneaking around the blocks all the time, getting a high income and always
smoking
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smoked
.
In other words
, letting the
information
 open help people learn about criminals and prevent them from causing problems.
Second
, imposing the press causes an erosion of the media. According to the Freedom House, a state must give newspapers and TV broadcasts the free to public anything, as long as it is true.
Therefore
, any country that violates the rules are badly damaging human rights, and
this
 violation is truly far more serious in
compare
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comparison
comparing
compared
 with the effect of spreading criminals data. Many argued that these kinds of news set a bad example for young children. I agree with
this
 point of view,
however
, only to some extent, showing schemes and violences to young generations are not always good;
On the contrary
, it seems that many schools, private schools have already implemented those records in order to educate the young about how they should not be when they turn old. In conclusion, it is a terrible idea to prevent the public from
information
 on criminals, since it can cause impasses in warning citizens and preserving the freedom of
media
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the media
.
Moreover
, it fails to educate young children about crime. In modern days, accessing
information
 is not only a way to boost intelligence, but
also
 a method of protecting ourselves.

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