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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

#happiness #life #factors
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It is true that
happiness
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 is a prerequisite to people’s quality of
life
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,
although
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 an actual definition of
happiness
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 seems to be difficult to describe, there are various factors which considered
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to be
 crucial in acquiring
happiness
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. It is quite laborious to find out an actual definition for the term
HAPPINESS
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. The reason for
this
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 is that
happiness
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 means different thing to different people. Most people may have at least one hobby or a
treat
something that is a source of danger
threat
 which could help them to uplift their spirits instantly. While for some people, it might be their job or a career which brings them a sense of fulfilment. At the same
time
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, for others, personal belongings are paramount of a serene
life
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. To take an example of a web designer, Richard Jackson, who believes that the key element for a pleasurable
life
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 is a close relationship. In my case,
happiness
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 is when I am taking my
time
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 out of a hectic routine to spend a quality
time
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 along with my family. There do seem to be some common needs that we all share in regards to experiencing or achieving pleasure.
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, investing in personal relationships can give a broad (long) way to boost up people’s level of
happiness
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.
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, spending even a fraction of
time
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 from a whole day with your children while doing some
share
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shared
 activities could help to build up an immense mutual understanding as well as an inner satisfaction in them, which is a subtle precursor to bring in levelled
happiness
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.
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, a prestigious line of work could help to raise people’s contentment by allowing them to have ample amount of wages.
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, they can entertain themselves with all the basic necessities of
life
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 without worrying about any financial distress. To sum up, due to a nature of
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happiness it
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happiness, it
 is not that easy to describe it in one specific sentence. We can merely acknowledge several factors which are mandatory to some extent in seeking
happiness
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.
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