It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important? Do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that
wildlife
is a necessary part of human
life
on which we all are dependent. While some people believe that
wildlife
protection needs
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better
good
funding and prior attention
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of
from
government, but I completely agree that there are other essential issues exist, having precedence, and they require more money than
wildlife
projects.
Firstly
, Global warming is one of the most crucial, dangerous issues all over the world that requires more funding and attention from the national governments. Climate change
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is occurring
has occurred
has been occurring
that is
affecting human and animal
life
throughout the earth.
For instance
, glaciers in Antarctica have been started melting and scientists are wary that it will increase
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water levels
the water level
water level
in coming
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years, and will
years and, will
possess a great threat to regions near to oceans. If activities causing global warming not stop, environment conditions will jeopardize and earth will become a heat chamber,
therefore
, human
life
will be under a severe danger. Another global issue to be
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considered
consider
on priority is
water
pollution caused due to plastic and waste disposal into the
sea
. Many industries and medical institutions are disposing their waste into rivers and
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the sea
seas
sea
, which is causing huge danger to
sea
life
. To illustrate
this
, many endangered
sea
species
such
as dolphins, whales are dying nowadays, due to the contamination of
water
in the ocean. If
sea
life
is not protected, we will have more extinct and endangered
water
species.
As a result
,
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the government
government
will have to provide huge funding for protection of
such
animals in the future. In my opinion,
although
,
wildlife
projects are very important in order to save the endangered plants and
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animals, but
animals but
, global warming and
water
pollution are the main problems that are impacting
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the earth
earth
tremendously, and they require more priority and money from the governments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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