Some people feel that entertainers are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

It has been well discussed around the globe that, celebrities are getting more wages compare with other professionals.
On the other hand
, there have many jobs where we need to pay higher salaries as compare with celebrities. Like every coin, it has two sides. It
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also sheds
also shed
light on both before drawing a logical conclusion. On one side of the issue, people think that it brings many positive aspects. The
first
one can be said that the quality of the work will be improved as well as they will engage with many social activities.
For example
, nowadays many actors and film stars are helping poor people.
However
, the teachers should be paid a higher salary as they are building our nation. They are entertained with a lower amount,
as a result
, highly qualified peoples are not interested in teaching profession. On the other side, others hold some opposing view which cannot be neglected.
To begin
with actors is being focused on their works rather
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than
then
addressing the quality.
For example
, now people are not often watching movies when they are passing leisure time.
Besides
that, If we encourage our teacher with handsome wages, they are not conscious about the study of the students as they are always thinking about how to earn money. In recent years study shows that, there have lots of coaching centres are in the city and teachers are being given their most of the time in these learning homes without providing time at school. To recapitulate, I would like to clarify my opinion that the positive aspect outweigh the down sites to a large extent. I think what
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I
i
have stated in
this
essay underline my viewpoint and requires no more discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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