Nowdays children have too much freedom. Some people think it may be dangerous in some aspects. Do you agree or disagree?

Everyone, wants
Accept comma addition
freedom, it is
freedom it is
freedom itis
generally believed that parents or teacher should not give
freedom
to children. In my opinion the childhood
life
is very important children ought to not give
freedom
. In
this
essay I fully agree with
this
essay
Suggestion
To
to
begin with, general view when under teen age have
freedom
, it could be very harmful children are very curious. If we give
freedom
, children will follow wrong pattern.
For instance
, I saw a many children who smoke in teenage
life
. Meanwhile, they use abusive language with elders, even they misbehave with people even they have
also
fought with adult youth.
Suggestion
On
on
the other hand, children do nothing in their
life
they do not take any interest in studies
however
that tells a lie with people, teacher and
also
a parents it might be they attract with drugs, 
for example
, my personal view, my cousin who now a fourteen year old he does not study, just cause is his father gives flexibility,
however
he does smocks,
also
he kicked around the street. In conclusion, these situations just could have handled by parents and teacher
otherwise
no one could save their
life
.

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