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Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV. What are the reasons of doing this. Do you think is it good idea to copy famous people.

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Average persons tend to copy famous celebrities by watching them on TV or reading magazines. I believe famous people show us how to live in a modern earth and it is a positive idea to follow celebrities In
this
 modern world, people easily get attracted to some famous people
as a result
, they copy their style to show love and support
for instance
, many people watch movies and they get attracted to celebrities easily
for example
 many clothing brands hire celebrities to promote their products via advertising.So we ordinary people will be eager to purchase those clothes There are many famous personalities in
this
 world, some have passed some are still alive
For instance
. Arnold Schwarzenegger he was the greatest builder in the world. Millions of people got inspired by his dedication and hard work,
moreover
 a boxing champion whose name was Mohammed Ali he is still the greatest of all time, many people have their love, affection towards him till now
for instance
 Mike Tyson he got inspired and joined the boxing by watching his fights And became a successful boxer To conclude. Famous personalities always try to motivate their fans,
this
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
thus
 they tend to follow them, I believe it is a good idea as long as you follow a right celebrity
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