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Air transportation is increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to other countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. Some people say this is good other believe that the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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With the advent of urbanization, the transportation system, across the globe has completely transformed. Owing to
this
, the aeroplanes are frequently used for import and export of edibles
such
 as fruits and vegetables to the countries who are facing scarcity of them or unfavourable conditions to grow them. While some argue that
this
 is not the optimal use of
such
 resources, I strongly believe that it is a great thing to do. Some people think that air
transport
 should be used for indispensable uses only. As the cost of aeroplane fuel is exorbitantly expensive, countries should not be using it for transporting less important goods. It should be used only for transporting major goods and alternatively,
food
 items should be transported through other inexpensive ways of transportation
such
 as, railways and via ships.
For instance
, it should be used to send official documents of the country or should be used by people who are paying to use that mode.
On the contrary
, I think that as most of the
food
 items are perishable, it is crucial to send them via fastest mode of
transport
.
Consequently
, the public could purchase fresh fruits and vegetables.
Conversely
, if other modes of
transport
 would be used, the risk of items getting rotten would be increased and no one wants to buy stale items.
As a result
, a lot of
food
 items would be wasted each year.
For example
, countries who sent
food
 items via aeroplane are able the feed more people than those who use other modes of
transport
 for exporting purposes. In conclusion, as many people think that aeroplanes should not be used to
transport
food
 items to other countries as its fuel cost is very high and
hence
 should only be used for inevitable purposes, I believe that air
transport
 should be used as it is fast due to which freshness of perishable items could be retained.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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