The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several career or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continue throughout life.

In the modern era,
career
opportunity is increasing day by day
that is
why several
career
is being used rather than single
career
. I will reveal why people select single
career
and several
career
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careers
.
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.
On the one hand
,
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,
single
career
provide
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provides
many benefits to people
.
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.
firstly
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Firstly
, doing
single job
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a single job
give huge knowledge related to their
career
, which enhance life experience.
Moreover
,
when
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When
people gain more experience in their job
,
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,
they become
experts
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experts, therefore
therefore
less time is consumed
in
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with
work.
single
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The single career
The single carrier
Single career
career
provide
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provides
more chance of promotion, which make people successful in their
life
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life, however
however
, single
career
will put negative impact on people as they can be bored from their work so it can
further
leads stress.
On the other hand
, despite having benefits of single
career
,
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,
multiple
career
is considered to be more important as if people choose multiple
career
,
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,
they will earn more money in
this
way they can
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their family needs
besides
they can provide better education to their children.
futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
Futhermore
, with the help of multiple jobs people can become creative as they do job in various fields
that is
why they become more experienced person. It has
also
some drawbacks because when they always remain busy in their works so they don't have enough time for their family
therefore
it can break down
relationship
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relationships
the relationship
a relationship
. To conclude,
although
many people prefer single
career
as they want to become expert in that field
,
Accept space
,
I believe that multiple
career
is more important than single
career
.
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