The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several career or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continue throughout life.

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In the modern era,
career
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opportunity is increasing day by day
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why several
career
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is being used rather than single
career
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. I will reveal why people select single
career
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and several
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career
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careers
.
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.
On the one hand
,
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,
single
career
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provide
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provides
many benefits to people
.
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.
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firstly
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Firstly
, doing
single job
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a single job
give huge knowledge related to their
career
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, which enhance life experience.
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,
when
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When
people gain more experience in their job
,
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,
they become
experts
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experts, therefore
therefore
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less time is consumed
in
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with
work.
single
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The single career
The single carrier
Single career
career
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provide
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provides
more chance of promotion, which make people successful in their
life
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life, however
however
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, single
career
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will put negative impact on people as they can be bored from their work so it can
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leads stress.
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, despite having benefits of single
career
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,
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,
multiple
career
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is considered to be more important as if people choose multiple
career
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,
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,
they will earn more money in
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way they can
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their family needs
besides
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they can provide better education to their children.
futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
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, with the help of multiple jobs people can become creative as they do job in various fields
that is
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why they become more experienced person. It has
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some drawbacks because when they always remain busy in their works so they don't have enough time for their family
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it can break down
relationship
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relationships
the relationship
a relationship
. To conclude,
although
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many people prefer single
career
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as they want to become expert in that field
,
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,
I believe that multiple
career
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is more important than single
career
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.
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