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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#wealth #guaranty #happiness
While some state that if
your
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
 are rich, you will automatically be happy,
on the other hand
, some individuals can assure that they are very joyful but full of economic problems. I personally do not agree with the statement above, but in
this
 essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will express my
opnion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
opinions
 on two
differents
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 points of view.
this
Suggestion
This
 is a topic that
goes
Suggestion
has been going
 on for ages.
First
 of all, being cheerful comes from inside
a
Suggestion
an
 individual and not your financial situation. In my opinion, it depends on having good and
stabel
resistant to change of position or condition
stable
 relationships with your family, friends and having good health. Actually,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 have some friends who go threw some economic problems and are very happy because they have a good social
life
.
On the other hand
, unfortunately money is what pays your rent, school, food, transportation, clothes etc. If some your basic needs, like safety, diet and so on, are not being accomplished you will not be content with what is going on in your
life
, because a lot of problems are going to show up. To summarize, on my point of view, cash does not buy happiness. You may have some economic problems, but if you have the correct mindset and attitude you can live a happy
life
 and a
positve
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.
On the other hand
, money can help contribute to a
peacful
not disturbed by strife or turmoil or war
peaceful
 spirit and overcome
dificulties
an effort that is inconvenient
difficulties
.
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