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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.

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Every nation around the lobe is keen on developing
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 technology as it is meant to ease the work done by people. It is believed that skills and lifestyle followed by many generations are fading out and there is no use in trying to preserve them. Looking at the positive side, it is obvious that the human population of the planet is increasing at an alarming rate and as the numbers rise the demand for products like clothes, vehicles, and other goods increase simultaneously.
Therefore
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, there is no point in sticking with previous methods like depending on a huge workforce to get the job done,
instead
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 technology has been providing the society with more sedentary methods to reduce the work exerted by humans and
in addition
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, it helps meeting the demand of products required.
For example
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, countries that have been relying on the old procedures to synthesize goods are still on the verge of poverty. Whereas, nations that depend on machines have a chance to
outcompete
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 their competitors.
On the other hand
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, it is vital to ensure the existence of conventional customs and lifestyle as they have a massive impact on economy sector and in supporting the older generation. To be precise, handmade products have a unique market value due to their standard and the reduced quantities.
For example
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, countries like Indonesia and Bangladesh still export clothes weaved by humans for an ample amount of money.
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, the food sectors that use traditional preparation techniques are highly accepted by a part of the community as they use methods like baking in
furnance
obtain or provide money for
finance
 which adds more texture to the cuisine. To conclude, no one could deny that a country’s prosperity depends on the development of
technology but
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technology, but
 it is important to ensure the presence of post traditions and customs as they have various advantageous roles in certain sectors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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