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You bought a TV a week ago but when you got home you discovered it did not work properly. You called customer service to report the problem but you have not yet received any help.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the poor performance of the television that I purchased from your store
last
 week. I am Kinnari Bodade, I live
besides
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 your store in Toronto. I have been purchasing electronic products from your store
from
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for
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past
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the past
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 7 years,
thus
, I purchased '
samsung
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 led 32 inches' with the product code 289636 on 5th August. The first problem was the lack of display quality.
While
 perusing the product specifications it was mentioned that 40 pixels
led
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LED
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 light were used to provide high screen
resolution
.Contrary to
this
, I observed the screen to be low
resolution
 and blurry.
Furthermore
, the remote
also
 stopped working suddenly, making the matter
more
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worse. I am unpleased that I had spent so much money on a product
that is
 not working properly. I connected with
the
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customer care
6th
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on 6th
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August
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of August
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 and explained
them
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the issue. Despite raising the complaint, I did not get any information from them regarding the
resolution
 of the problem. As a
resolution
 to
this
 problem, I would appreciate
if
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 you could repair the machine at no cost to me. Thanks for taking
this
 matter into consideration. Yours sincerely, Kinnari Bodade
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task achievement
Your letter does well to address the task prompt comprehensively; however, it can be improved by including more specific details. For instance, mentioning exactly what the customer care representative said would strengthen your case.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to minor grammatical inaccuracies and punctuation errors. Correct phrases like 'from past 7 years' to 'for the past 7 years' and ensure proper spacing after commas and periods.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a clear and well-structured flow, starting with a polite but firm introduction, detailing the issues with the TV, and ending with a clear request for resolution.
task achievement
Strong task achievement with a clear response to each part of the prompt, including specific product details and a chronological account of actions taken.

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