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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Travelling is the way to have new experiences. As the world is declared as a global village people have access to almost every part of the world. The tourism industry has seen a major boom most of the individuals choose isolated places
such
 as Antarctica or Sahara Desert over highly populated tourist destinations popular in holidaying and relaxing. Visiting
such
 places gives a new
experience but
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experience, but
 it certainty comes with many favoured and
unfavoured
without flavoring added
unflavoured
 circumstances. On one hand, tourists gain many advantages visiting
such
 places. As the living conditions are tough, the people interested in exploring
such
 places
has
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have
 to go through some extensive exercises which helps them in gaining physical and mental strength.
For
example should
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example, should
 be medically fit land should possess ability to make quick decisions like how to keep warm in freezing temperatures or to navigate to find water in desert areas.
Such
 exercises and surviving
skills creates
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skills, create
skills create
 a stable, challenging and
strong individual
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a strong individual
.
On the other hand
,
such
 tourists destinations
comes
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come
 with many disadvantages. These serious living conditions
proves
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prove
 fatal to some people as the cooling temperatures in Antarctica are
low
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lower
 than anyone could bear. People
suffers
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suffer
are suffering
 from frost bites which can result in fatal infections resulting in loss of limb through major surgeries.In
Sahara Desert
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the Sahara Desert
, the temperature is
exteremly
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
 high and people are prone to heat strokes which can result in loss of life. These extreme weather conditions can be harmful to
majority
Suggestion
the majority
 of tourists. In conclusion, these destinations can be dangerous and life threatening. The person visiting
such
 places should be mentally and physically fit and should consider all the harmful impacts before visiting. If all the card falls in right places travelling to
such
 place can be an experience of a lifetime.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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