Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

In the modern world,
music
is considered as one of the stress relievers tools. Some people believe that the traditional
music
is best and should be cherished, whereas, other group thought that international
music
adds variety and should be promoted to bring people closer across globe. In my opinion, people should respect to the individual preference as
this
is a matter of
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the individual’s
an individual’s
individual’s
like and dislike.
This
essay will discuss both sides of
this
argument and come up with
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an opinion
opinions
opinion
. Traditional
music
is
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the soul
soul
of the local
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people, which
people which
connects the people with their history and depth of their culture. It is
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a sense
the sense
sense
of pride for them and respect to their
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ancestors
ancestor
.
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Especially
Specially
, people in small towns are very closed to their
music
and celebrated most of their rituals with traditional
music
. In India, people have four different functions in marriages which spread across a
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week's
week
time, for
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a particular type
particular types
particular type
of
music
People felt pride in their
music
and consider nourishment of it as their responsibility.
However
, International
music
provided new dimensions to the
music
. It is obvious for people to get bored from traditional
music
and they start looking forward for something new. International
music
addresses
this
requirement of people.
Music
is not only about the sound variations, rather it carries the culture of
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the region
a region
region
. It is
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a great source
great source
to bind people of different backgrounds and connect them beyond
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the borders
borders
.
Music
of Michael Jackson and
a river that rises in western New Mexico and flows westward through southern Arizona to become a tributary of the Colorado River
Gila
Jelo
unites the people across countries. It is important mean to bring people on
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the same platform
same platform
and take them towards peace and harmony. To sum up, both traditional and international
music
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has
have
their own
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importance and role
importance and role to
play. Same
music
is traditional in one part of
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the globe
globe
and international in another part of
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the globe
globe
. I believe it should be left to individual choice and provide them
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the freedom
freedom
to choose their ways of entertainment and relaxation.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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