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Organized tour to remote community and other countries is increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for the local people and the environment?

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Nowadays, companies provide numerous packages for tourists to visit a
place
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, which is far from their homeland, as it rejuvenates them. While increased
tourism
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 boosts the
economy
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 of the nation,
however
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, it produces damage to the local
environment
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. For local people, it is a sign of positive development because, with the
increase
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 in the number of tourists in any country, the
economy
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 of that nation improves. There is, not only,
increase
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 in the number of jobs but
also
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, provide a better lifestyle
to
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for
 the residents.
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, Bali is one of the beautiful nations in the world and its
economy
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 entirely depends upon the
tourism
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 sector. If the
tourism
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 sector collapse,
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 the
economy
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 of the country
also
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 clashes.
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, an
increase
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 in organized tours to any remote
place
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 benefits the native people.
Besides
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, the advantages of
tourism
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 for the residents, it produces damage to the regional
environment
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. When
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 visit any
place
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, they throw their waste here and there,
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 creates pollution at that
place
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. The pollution pollutes the land as well as water resources, which are necessary for anyone to survive.
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, a recent survey conducted by Cambridge University showed that an
increase
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 in the number of tourists at any
place
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 causes a rise in temperature there.
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, it harms the local wildlife.
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, with an
increase
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 in
tourism
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, people would cut more trees to build hotels and restaurants. To conclude, organized tours at any
place
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 help in improving the
economy
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, but at the cost of the
environment
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. In my opinion,
tourism
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to
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in
 a remote community should
increase
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 at a certain level where it does not produce any harm to the
environment
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.

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