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In today's world, many people spend increasingly less time in their homes. What are the reasons for this? What are the effects of this trend on individuals and society?

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Nowadays, most citizens lead a life outside their homes.
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 at school or work. We
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 travel more.
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, we generally experience more stress, but our societies become more connected. The primary reason is that we compete with more people than ever. The population of all countries has grown significantly, but the opportunities are still limited. So, we all have to struggle more to have a better career, whether at school or work.
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, in the past, you could earn a decent income with a high school diploma only, but today you may need a PHD for the same impact. Another reason is that we have the chance to travel with little effort.
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, plane tickets have become much cheaper, while it is no longer difficult to buy a private vehicle. Thanks to these developments, even people with a limited income began to travel in a regular way.
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, in the past, only the rich could go abroad, but today even students can do the same.
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 means that they spend less
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 at home.
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, we have become more fatigued in general. Studying all the
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 or working hard requires much effort.
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 raises the level of stress. Over
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, it causes depression or similar problems. Unfortunately, there is now too much competition, and only
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a few
 of us can stay away from it. But, the effects on society have become fairly positive. In the past, most of us lived in an isolated way. Interaction between us was limited. But, we are no longer stuck
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 our homes. We are together everywhere. We have the chance to meet new people all the
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 has created a richer culture. In conclusion, we spend less
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 at home, because we have to improve ourselves, yet
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 has resulted in both positive and negative effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • increasingly
  • proliferation
  • recreational activities
  • technological advancements
  • remote communication
  • single-person households
  • social interaction
  • cohesion
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • environmental impact
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