Many people think that the behavior of professional sportsmen/sportswomen on or off the field is not important as long as they are good players. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

It is often argued that sports
people
Suggestion
peoples'
person
peoples
code of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
on or off the field is not mandatory as long as they are performing
good
Suggestion
well
best
better
the best
.
This
essay disagrees with the aforementioned statement as the overall behaviour of sports personality is important.
This
essay will
first
, discuss that
atheletic
relating to or befitting athletics or athletes
athletic
people should behave properly as they are viewed as
role model
Suggestion
role models
a role model
and
further
, outline that since they
repersent
take the place of or be parallel or equivalent to
represent
their country so they should behave properly. Several individuals consider sports professionals as their role models and follow their footprints,
thus
, it is essential for them to set a good example on or off the field for their fans.
This
is to say,
people including
Accept comma addition
people, including
the young generations are fascinated and impressed with the lifestyle and success of sports people, which persuades
them to to follow
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them to follow
their path in
oder
(often plural) a command given by a superior (e.g., a military or law enforcement officer) that must be obeyed
order
to achieve that fame.
As a result
, it is very critical for
sports person
Suggestion
sports people
the sports person
to behave in a professional manner as well as follow the specific code of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
for their
ans
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
to follow them. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by the Times showed that more than 80 percent of people copy the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of athletics,
hence
it is essential
for them follow
Suggestion
for them to follow
their standard of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
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