Many people think that the behavior of professional sportsmen/sportswomen on or off the field is not important as long as they are good players. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

It is often argued that sports
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peoples'
person
peoples
people
code of
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behavior
on or off the field is not mandatory as long as they are performing
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well
best
better
the best
good
.
This
essay disagrees with the aforementioned statement as the overall behaviour of sports personality is important.
This
essay will
first
, discuss that
relating to or befitting athletics or athletes
athletic
atheletic
people should behave properly as they are viewed as
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role models
a role model
role model
and
further
, outline that since they
take the place of or be parallel or equivalent to
represent
repersent
their country so they should behave properly. Several individuals consider sports professionals as their role models and follow their footprints,
thus
, it is essential for them to set a good example on or off the field for their fans.
This
is to say,
Accept comma addition
people, including
people including
the young generations are fascinated and impressed with the lifestyle and success of sports people, which persuades
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them to follow
them to to follow
their path in
(often plural) a command given by a superior (e.g., a military or law enforcement officer) that must be obeyed
order
oder
to achieve that fame.
As a result
, it is very critical for
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sports people
the sports person
sports person
to behave in a professional manner as well as follow the specific code of
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behavior
for their
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
ans
to follow them. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by the Times showed that more than 80 percent of people copy the
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behavior
of athletics,
hence
it is essential
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for them to follow
for them follow
their standard of
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behavior
.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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