37. People believe that teaching children at home is best for child's development while other think it is important to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and provide your own opinion.

It is a fact that our contemporary living communities have been more complex that those in the past;
therefore
, some parents prefer homeschooling for their children. Others believe that
school
education
is much important and superior to homeschooling. The essay will discuss both benefits and presents my view that I support the latter.
To begin
with, homeschooling has become popular in certain region worldwide.
Firstly
, it provides flexible schedules for children and their parents.
This
also
reduces stress for both due to eliminating peer pressure or busy
school
schedules.
In addition
, homeschooling provides an option for students to select their favourite content in terms of their inborn gifts.
For example
, many famous Chinese athletes had homeschooling experiences because they were able to focus on training lessons.
Finally
, homeschooling provides safer learning environments for children so that they have less chances to nurture bad habits
such
as smoking, drinking or doing drugs because  they are supervised by their parents. 
On the other hand
, some parents believe that
school
education
is a better option for their children.
Firstly
, curricula are systemic and profound because they are composed of experienced educators in terms of children's development stages.
Moreover
,
school
environment provides opportunities for students to develop their skills
such
as interpersonal interaction, communication, cooperation, public speech, etc.
Last
but not the least, students at
school
need to learn to obey the rules, to follow their daily agenda, and to organize their personal things.
As a result
,  
scho
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school, education
ol
education
will train students' capacities for their future post-secondary academic
education
and professional careers in their later lives. In summary, I personally opine
school
education
because it provides systemic learning contents for regular students.
Besides
, it provides mimic social atmospheres for students to nurture and practice their personal skills.
This
will enhance their personal capacities.
Although
homeschooling is less stressful for students and parents,  it is only suitable for certain students due to the above reasons.
Therefore
, in the current global societies, the
school
education
are a major trend for ordinary students because of the above reasons.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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