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Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them . other people believe it is good to have friends who sometimes diasgree with them.Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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 based only on their values and interests, others do not see any problem if their
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. In my case, if it was possible, I would surround myself with only
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 who share my view and I will discuss why having
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 who disagree with your
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 can be disappointing. In general, we call
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people
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 who have something personal in common with us and try to be in touch with them. Selecting carefully, we create our own "family" where each member shares our values and is able to support each other. Unlike a real family whose members we can not choose,
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 become the only ones who provide us with the ability to be ourselves.
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calming and emotional support, especially in a stressful situation.
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, all
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 are different and the ability to accept a stranger's
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 is a necessary skill. Some
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 believe that
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 who criticize their ideas, help them to consider their own views in different ways so that it can lead to their personal growth. It is possible because of a respectful debate, which is more likely between
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 than between less familiar
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friendship can be source of a painless criticism helping us to be better.
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 a debate between
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 can be useful for one, it can destroy relationships for another. It depends on what exactly you expect from friendship - the comfort zone or an honest
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 In my case, I prefer a friend's support rather than debates.

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task achievement
Consider expanding the arguments with more examples or experiences to support your views. This will enhance the strength of your arguments, particularly in the discussion of differing opinions.
coherence and cohesion
Try to create smoother transitions between paragraphs to improve the flow of your ideas. This can be achieved by using linking phrases that connect the ideas better.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your conclusion clearly summarizes your perspective and reinforces your main arguments. A well-rounded conclusion can leave a lasting impression on the reader.
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You provide a clear personal opinion, which is important for a well-rounded essay.
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The differentiation between the advantages and disadvantages of both types of friendships shows a good understanding of the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • like-minded
  • harmony
  • conflict
  • emotional support
  • belonging
  • intellectual growth
  • critical thinking
  • open-mindedness
  • diverse viewpoints
  • challenging beliefs
  • social circle
  • supportive environment
  • echo chamber
  • narrow-mindedness
  • globalized society
  • empathy
  • respectful debate
  • collaboration
  • resilience
  • adaptability
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