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People eat more processed food than they did in the past. Why is this? What are the effects of this?

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Undoubtedly
,
Accept space
,
nowadays peoples' eating habits have changed and
such
 change involves that people have tended to consume more processed
food
 than ever before in the past. Shift in
this
 approach is due to present's hectic lifestyle.
However
,
this
 approach is associated with many health related problems.
To begin
 with, owing to the fast paced modern lifestyle, people have
staarted
take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
started
stated
 to consume processed
food
. To simply put
this
, current global market is extremely competitive, due to which people are required to work harder and longer hours than they worked in the past and
this
 trend simply takes their cooking time away.
For example
, according to a research, more than half of the employees in
Newyork
the largest city in New Jersey; located in northeastern New Jersey
Newark
New york
, nowadays, spend most of their time at work
instead
 of cooking their meals at home.
Therefore
, modern way of living allow people to be more competitive and stay emphasised at work, rather than actually devoting their time to cook fresh lunches and dinners.
However
, there are serious consequences on individual's heath because of growth in processed
food
 consumption. Clearly, processed
food
 is made by altering
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 natural form for peoples' comfort and convenience,
such
 as to make it taste better, though,
this
 process may
invlove
connect closely and often incriminatingly
involve
 adding chemicals, preservatives and sugar.
Consequently
, consumers may be taking
additional amount
Suggestion
the additional amount
additional amounts
 of sugar than recommended.
Thus
, health
problems namely,
Suggestion
problems, namely,
problems, namely
 diabetes, cardiovascular disease and obesity are directly connected to consumption of convenience
food
. To conclude, being competitive in the global market has changed people to eat more processed
food
 and people have been facing problems associated with their health.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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