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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to students' sports activities as they allocate to their libraries. To what extent do you agree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you have to support your answer.

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Academic achievement and recreational activities are important part of the university education system. It is argued that college and universities should provide equal allocation to sports as it provides to libraries. I believe sports and libraries plays equally important role in the development of students.
To begin
 with, sports play a chief role in the development of graduates. Some students have been keen interesting in sports and when educational institutes provide proper equipment to students,
then
 they reveal their talent and skills.
Therefore
, they get employment opportunities in the sports field and far away from drugs and bad peer company.
For example
, in my college
time
 we had a football team in which I participated and won a prize at the national level that gave me the opportunity of a job in the sports field. Not only
this
, sports are
also
 important for healthy life style. When students play games they stay fit and get rid of diseases. 
However
, the role of
library
 can not be ignored, because the most of the students depend on the service of a
library
. When they have assignments and projects. Only the
library
 that has a great collection of books in the different fields along with, the access to computers. That student can use the free Wifi facility.
Also
, they can get the peaceful environment during the exam
time
.
For example
, in my college
time
 during my exams, I used to go to the
library
, where I spent my quality of
time
 for the peaceful atmosphere and
also
, got marks.
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